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Dunn Meadow

In IDS on November 29, 2010 at 1:00 pm

Interesting use of “you” in the IDS today. What do you think?

JOHN SEASLY

This is the story of a plot of earth. Of dirt and grass and mud and rain. A right-angled triangle, 925 feet long by 407 feet wide, intersected by a natural stream.

You have crossed it hundreds of times. Here you have thrown Frisbees, had picnics, walked your dog and flown kites. Some of you have kissed here. Some of you have been shot at here.

This is the story of the soil beneath IU. This is the story of Dunn Meadow.

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  1. I’m a fan of it, in this case. The use of “you” is a tricky thing, but for Dunn Meadow, literally EVERYONE at IU has at least walked through it. It’s a part of IU’s identity, so it’s safe to say that each “you” (each reader) will be able to identify with it.

    Plus, it’s not over the top. It’s one graph and then the story moves on.

  2. What if it used first person: “We’ve crossed it hundreds of times.” / “Some of us have kissed there.”

    (Because the writer has also had these experiences.)

  3. I really like the second person, but I think first person could have worked, too. Second person works because it brings the reader into the story. It makes you pause and think about the experiences you’ve had in Dunn Meadow. First person, however, would be revisiting those memories WITH the reader and acknowledging that we have these shared experience. I think both approaches could work…

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